2013年3月16日 星期六

Our Story


I met you unexpectedly in the campus one day,
And you took my breath away.
I couldn't stop thinking of you,
But I guess you already knew.

You always wore a smile on your face,
which made my heart race.
I kept staring at you like a fool,
when you played the guitar and sang a song for me on the roof.

You were the reason that  made me smile,
even when we miles apart.
Our love was like for the prince and princess,
which was precious and priceless. 

( Image source:http://yhoo.it/14HVSZR )


Description:
I was thinking about a love story that happened to one of my friends. This poem is mainly about the excitement of love and the memories of the couple. The poetry is actually a story about romantic and fancy love among people.






2 則留言:

  1. Good try Jenny. Please add the URL of the photo image you included in this post.

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    I met you unexpectedly in the campus one day,
    But (And) you took my breath away.
    I couldn't stop thinking of you,
    But I guess you already knew.

    You always wore a smile on your face,
    which made my heart jumped (delete: like on the race; heart racing).
    I kept staring at you like a fool,
    when you played the guitar and singed a song for me on the roof.

    You were the reason made me smile (You were the reason that made me smile/ You made me smile),
    even when we were (delete: were) lived in mile.
    Our love was like prince and princess (a fairy tale?),
    which was precious and priceless.

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  2. original
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    met you unexpectedly in the campus one day,
    And you took my breath away.
    I couldn't stop thinking of you,
    But I guess you already knew.

    You always wore a smile on your face,
    which made my heart racing.
    I kept staring at you like a fool,
    when you played the guitar and singed a song for me on the roof.

    You were the reason that made me smile,
    even when we lived in mile.
    Our love was like prince and princess,
    which was precious and priceless.

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    corrected

    I met you unexpectedly in the campus one day,
    And you took my breath away.
    I couldn't stop thinking of you,
    But I guess you already knew.

    You always wore a smile on your face,
    which made my heart race.
    I kept staring at you like a fool,
    when you played the guitar and sang a song for me on the roof.

    You were the reason that made me smile,
    even when we lived miles apart
    Our love was like for the prince and princess,
    which was precious and priceless.

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